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a bludgeoning pathos
is beating at the stalemate
of her lightless eyes

but the nervous flutterings of (almost)
is where I've trapped my heart,
the meticulous ecstasy of longing
clawing at the depths
of her corpse
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the-lost-owl Aug 30, 2010  Student Writer
I love this.

I may be alone, but I think the more sense a poem makes, the worse it is.

I can garner almost nothing out of this. :D

*runs to click +watch*
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:icontoxic-nebulae:
toxic-nebulae Aug 30, 2010  Student Writer
:heart: I agree with you there.
I can get some meaning from this, but that might just be because I wrote it. I've written much less coherent things.
And thank you. <3
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the-lost-owl Aug 31, 2010  Student Writer
So have I.

I don't remember its name, but I wrote a poem that probably makes no sense to me anymore. It's all twisted and inverted and stuff. It's Burton meets... my attempt at Seuss? XD

My newest one is kind of copying your style though. Although I know exactly what I'm talking about, which may or may not be good...
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:icontoxic-nebulae:
toxic-nebulae Aug 31, 2010  Student Writer
:heart: Well, consider me flattered.
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the-lost-owl Sep 2, 2010  Student Writer
:la: No problem. You and *Sapph0 and a few others are my particular favorites. :D
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toxic-nebulae Sep 2, 2010  Student Writer
<3
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exquisiteoath Aug 27, 2010  Student General Artist
I quite like the way the 3 last lines unravel.
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toxic-nebulae Aug 27, 2010  Student Writer
Thank you. :heart:
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:iconilyilaice:
Mysterious and compelling. :heart:
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toxic-nebulae Aug 24, 2010  Student Writer
:heart: Thanks!
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