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he said that one day I,
who have grown accustomed
to accumulating moons,
drawn like moths
to my Venus-brightness,
would meet my match.

he told me I would be
captured by the brilliance
of a star,
a Betelgeuse, a behemoth:
supergiant turned supernova turned
supermassive black hole.

he informed me, peeking out
from under my gravity,
his erratic elliptical orbit,
that one day I would be
swallowed up

and that it would be poetic justice.
:icontoxic-nebulae:
an idea that I've had for a while now, but just managed to put voice to
and I think that I quite like the result, though criticism is welcome, as always
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Mood: Joy ~arsenic-sea Apr 4, 2013  New member Hobbyist Writer
lovely poem
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:icontoxic-nebulae:
*toxic-nebulae Apr 4, 2013  Student Writer
<3 thank you.
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:iconexquisiteoath:
I love the enjambment in the second stanza; though I'm not quit sure about the Muse reference... I know they aren't the *owners* of supermassive black hole as a phrase, but it's a fairly hard link between the phrase and what they have done with it.
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*toxic-nebulae Jan 16, 2013  Student Writer
it's not even a phrase, it's a scientific term.
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:iconexquisiteoath:
I quite happily stand corrected. (I had always believed it to be an adjective and a noun rather than a proper noun in of itself).
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:icontoxic-nebulae:
*toxic-nebulae Jan 16, 2013  Student Writer
it's just the largest type of black hole (those commonly found in the centre of galaxies).
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:iconexquisiteoath:
Gotcha. I honestly did not know this.
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~em-arginated Jan 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Very beautiful and clever and lovely to read aloud. :heart:
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:icontoxic-nebulae:
*toxic-nebulae Jan 15, 2013  Student Writer
:heart: thank you.
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:iconriparii:
Sometimes I get to the end of a poem and smile.
Love poems like that.
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