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she never had eyes as bright as
cold
or song as clear as
dark
but ever into her starry skies
I withered,
drawn into abysmal depths
by the promise
of a ravaged warmth,
somewhere near the centre.

now,
at the zenith of her autumnal beauty,
I find myself lost;
her brilliant voice
in prosepoetry elegance
shall whisper "I love"
into corroded dark
and tear all of the roadblocks
forcibly
from my mind.
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:icondreamsinstatic:
dreamsinstatic Featured By Owner Jun 29, 2012
Your fantastic work has been featured in Friday Night Features.
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:icontoxic-nebulae:
toxic-nebulae Featured By Owner Jun 29, 2012  Student Writer
:heart: thank you!
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:icondreamsinstatic:
dreamsinstatic Featured By Owner Jul 2, 2012
You're welcome.
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:iconpagan-poetess:
pagan-poetess Featured By Owner Jun 19, 2012  Professional Writer
'but ever into her starry skies
I withered...'
gosh, that's beautiful :heart:

i like the line you removed from the poem.... maybe it can be used somewhere else?
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:icontoxic-nebulae:
toxic-nebulae Featured By Owner Jun 19, 2012  Student Writer
I put it back...it's still in there.
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:iconpagan-poetess:
pagan-poetess Featured By Owner Jun 19, 2012  Professional Writer
i think it works nicely with the line in there :)
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:icontonepainter:
tonepainter Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I know this is an old discussion... but I like the line breaks a lot. You can add me to your line break army :D
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:icontoxic-nebulae:
toxic-nebulae Featured By Owner Jun 19, 2012  Student Writer
YUSS
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THELONGHAIREDREDNECK Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Great piece :)
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:icontoxic-nebulae:
toxic-nebulae Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2011  Student Writer
<3 thank you.
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