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how much of you do I own

the crescents between
your fingers
, the inflection of your voice,
your opinions on Descartes
and physics and the
colour pink,

will you spill them into my hands
like red wine,
can I call them mine
I love this one
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:iconsammur-amat:
Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2014   General Artist
love-struck and loveliness is what this is :heart:
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toxic-nebulae Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2014  Student Writer
:heart:
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NotenSMSK Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Mhmm - I love this one too. The absolute possession as I would put it - taking each and everything and making it yours... It is interesting that you ask in the end if you can call them yours :) You don't ask whether you can MAKE them yours... Over all a short and clever work!
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toxic-nebulae Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2014  Student Writer
<3 thank you.
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NotenSMSK Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
You are welcome!
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muscularteeth Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2014
oh, oh, oh. this is really beautiful.
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toxic-nebulae Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2014  Student Writer
:heart: thank you.
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therootcellar Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2014  Student Writer
I love this one too :) 
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toxic-nebulae Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2014  Student Writer
:heart:
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ButterflyTorn Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2014
If only it were that easy.

I love this one too. Heart 
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toxic-nebulae Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2014  Student Writer
:heart: thank you.
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rlkirkland Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I like this. :)
Nit... The comma use on the fourth line is a distraction--or--ask yourself
What's it suppose to add for a reader?
Timing issues could be achieved with more traditional punctuation, with less confusion.
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shep4life Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
the crescents between
your fingers


great line
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toxic-nebulae Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2014  Student Writer
thanks! I wasn't sure if there was an actual term for that, but oh well
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shep4life Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
they are just called web spaces...nothing specific...lol
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Mr-Timeshadow Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2014
Hmm...for some reason that probably says a lot about me, I instantly remembered Crash Davis's rant in Bull Durham about what he believes. That's a compliment, FYI...
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