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the flagrant impossibility,
the undeniable otherness of you
(ineluctable and raw
as a cracked egg,
a sunrise)
glints in every turn of your eyes.

you are a universe
unto yourself,
a system of Heavenly bodies
heavy with influence:
planets whir at your fingertips,
massive and
subatomic.

I wonder how you see me:
as a dispassionate judge of the cosmos,
my actions a blur in a sea of
equal and opposite?

or—do I excite you?
do you ponder the
composition of my atmosphere,
the molten heat at my core?

do you ever,
for a single, measured moment,
forget your station
and allow yourself to be pulled
into my gravity,
playing electron to my
nucleus:

barely there, nearly
unmeasurable,
jumping energy levels,
juggling photons?

if this is true,
I also know
that when you remember yourself,
pulling the threads of myriad orbits
tighter about you,
there is an electric sort of magic in your gaze
whenever it meets mine.
it's 4 A.M. and I can't sleep and thus: poem.
watch me read this here: [link]
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:iconimaginative-lioness:
imaginative-lioness Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I have featured this piece in my journal: [link]
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:icontoxic-nebulae:
toxic-nebulae Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2013  Student Writer
<3 thank you.
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:iconlovespoon:
Lovespoon Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2013  Professional Writer
Great poem. And spectacular reading of it on youtube.com.

Now that you've mastered the erotica-science, science, erotica poems you should work on an epic!

:love:
:teddy:
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:iconfavriel:
Favriel Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2013
your poetry is soo... inspiring. that when i read you i instantly want to write something, but then i realize that i got no talent. haha
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:icontoxic-nebulae:
toxic-nebulae Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2013  Student Writer
:heart: thank you!
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glossolalias Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2013
beautiful worded and subtlety erotic. well done.
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:icontoxic-nebulae:
toxic-nebulae Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2013  Student Writer
:heart: thank you.
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:iconmr-timeshadow:
Mr-Timeshadow Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2012
Jeez, that's not fair! Usually, not sleeping at 4 am means someone else is snoring, or I have a runny nose, or nature's calling, but the one thing I aint is poetical...
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:icontoxic-nebulae:
toxic-nebulae Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2012  Student Writer
words run riot in my mind when I can't sleep
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:iconmr-timeshadow:
Mr-Timeshadow Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2012
Sometimes I experience that, and sometimes pictures. I am a little unhinged, and as a kid I suffered intrusive images of things that scared me. It's tough to explain what they were or why they scared me, but they did.
Now, I often hear snatched of dialogue from a movie, and sometimes need months to track down which ones they come from (one took me six months to peg as a line from Chariots of Fire).
Sometimes, during waking hours, I hear fragments of music; a passage or so. And it's usually from a movie as well.
So: the good news is I sleep pretty well these days. The bad news: they run riot in my head when I'm awake...
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