Deviant Login Shop  Join deviantART for FREE Take the Tour
×

:icontoxic-nebulae: More from toxic-nebulae


More from deviantART



Details

Submitted on
April 1, 2012
File Size
726 bytes
Link
Thumb

Stats

Views
275
Favourites
24 (who?)
Comments
12
Downloads
6
×
If, in its due time, each temporal thing
Should take itself to fly, on spectral wing,
Away from places that memories reach,
Fading into that melancholy breach
That is the absence of living recall—
If nothing rises but that it should fall
Into oblivion when none are left
To remember that once, this tree bereft
Of fruit and leaves, in its living hour,
Boasted many a sweet-smelling flower—
If naught is gained by the passage of time
Save the gloomy turn of this very rhyme—
Is love, then, as meaningless and as bare
As unseen phantoms in the empty air?
NaPoWriMo day #1. Prompt: carpe diem.
Add a Comment:
 
:iconvespera:
vespera Feb 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
YAY a fixed form that doesn't suck ;)

This was delightful
Reply
:icontoxic-nebulae:
toxic-nebulae Feb 18, 2013  Student Writer
:heart: and I know how rarely you don't hate rhyming poetry, so thank you.
Reply
:iconvespera:
vespera Feb 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You should be proud of this one. I'm not sure how it really stacks up compared to most rhyming poetry, but I think it's likely publishable, so you may want to look into that :)
Reply
:icontoxic-nebulae:
toxic-nebulae Feb 18, 2013  Student Writer
<3 I'm actually rather proud of this one
Reply
:iconpagan-poetess:
pagan-poetess Apr 7, 2012  Professional Writer
this is absolutely incredible :heart:
Reply
:icontoxic-nebulae:
toxic-nebulae Apr 7, 2012  Student Writer
:blush: thank you!
Reply
:iconpagan-poetess:
pagan-poetess Apr 8, 2012  Professional Writer
you're so so welcome :) :heart:
Reply
:iconfuzzyhoser:
FuzzyHoser Apr 3, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:clap: Well done, dear.
I love when rhyme is so well executed. :heart:
Reply
:icontoxic-nebulae:
toxic-nebulae Apr 3, 2012  Student Writer
:hug: thank you very much.
Reply
:iconfuzzyhoser:
FuzzyHoser Apr 3, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
My pleasure. :hug:
Reply
Add a Comment: